
I knew instantly she wasn’t a happy woman. Maybe it was the way she carried herself as she cut across the park toward
The young woman turned north on
I crossed Brennan at the crosswalk, followed the sidewalk, and stopped at the entrance to the building. The door wasn’t shut. The latch was broken. I wasn’t expecting a warm welcome. I knocked anyway. The sound echoed back to me from the empty room beyond. No answer. I knocked again. I waited a minute or two. When I didn’t hear approaching footsteps, I pushed the door open. It squeaked loudly, as if protesting my intrusion. I ignored the noise and stepped inside the abandoned hotel.
The room smelled of musty carpet, rotting food, and urine. Trash littered the floor. Old clothes were heaped against the far wall. A staircase wound upward. I called out, “Hello. Is anyone here?” I knew she was inside somewhere, but she didn’t answer. I started up the stairs. Some of the treads were cracked, a few were missing. I picked my steps carefully as I made my way upstairs. At the top, I turned left down a long hallway.
“Hello? Mary?” Only silence answered my call.
I pushed open the first door, the second, and the third. The fourth door was latched. I knocked. Footsteps crept toward the door. I saw movement on the other side of the peephole viewer. “Mary? Mary Pickford? Is that you?”
“Who are you?”
“My name is Anthony Michael.”
“How do you know me?”
“I have something for you.”
“You didn’t answer my question. How did you find me?”
“Your sister told me where to look.”
“Beth knows where I am? What do you want?”
“She saw you in the park. She followed you, but lost you in a crowd along
“What about?”
“Please open the door.”
The door opened a crack. One green eye inspected me from head to foot, resting on the briefcase I held in my left hand. She must have been satisfied with what she saw because the door opened wider.
“Come in,” she said, gesturing toward a straight back chair beside the window.
I sat down and placed the briefcase on my lap. I took a key out of my jacket pocket and opened the locks. I took out an envelope, “I work for the estate of James Dillier Throckmorton.” When Mary started to speak, I held up my hand. “You don’t know him, and you don’t know me. I’m merely the messenger. Someone wants you off the streets and in college where you belong. Open the envelope.”
Mary looked around the shabby room she could never make into a home. Her hands shook as she ripped open the seal. Inside was a cashier’s check. Her face paled, her shoulders straightened, and hope glistened in her eyes, as she counted the zeros on a one million dollar check.
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24 comments:
From rags to riches.
I thoroughly enjoy your writing style. Just enough descriptors in the words to paint a vivid portrayal of the scene without going overboard.
now this has me hooked..:)
Very well written. I liked reading it.
I knew instantly
Nicely written, and I wasn't expecting that ending.
Jeff B: Wow, thanks for your encouraging remarks.
Confused: Good. Come on back for some more, I have what I hope is, a fun story for Portrait of Words.
gautami tripathy: Thanks!
anthonynorth: It isn't always easy to have a surprise ending, usually readers have me pegged. I'm glad the surprise made it to the end.
Another great piece. The was so well written.
A person in need. You draw her well...Her once white sweater (with stains of time), slumped shoulders and cast down eyes, a person deserving college and the chance for a better life. I enjoyed your description of the process of seeking her out.
It’s always a joy to come here, ‘cause I know I’ll get easily, happily lost in your stories and leave either smiling or blown away…like the Boardwalk piece. Geesh! So ditto Jeff again…and present. Your story-writing style is peach meat ;-) This piece is a big smile. So big that I forgive you for killing me again with your Dallas area street names ;-)
missalister
Lilly: Thank you. Your comments are always so kind.
Present: Thanks! I'm glad you found some enjoyment during your visit.
missalister: Thank you for your forgiveness. I think maybe I miss Dallas about as much as you. My ringtone is George Strait's 'I Can't See Texas From Here' Sad, but true! I just came back from my Dallas "fix". Every so often, MUST GO. And thank you for your humbling words.
you always have a surprising ending..
I really love the description of each inch of the steps...
That was very vividly written , I loved it and I really love happy endings :)
now that was a blessing... beautifully written
You hooked me in, I had to read it all the way to the very last word! You did a great job writing this!
This put me right back in my childhood watching my favorite show, The Millionaire. I thoroughly enjoyed it!
And thanks for your advice about first impressions. It makes sense and I'll try it!
Hi!
Awesome story!!!!! I liked it very much. Hope she gets to college. Thanks for stopping by my place.
Sherrie
latree: Thank you. You are too kind.
Fantasies: I'm big into happy endings, too.
paisley: Thanks!
Elisabeth: Thanks for the encouragement.
Linda: You're the only one who understood where I got my idea! I loved that show, too! And let me know how it works.
splummer: I hope she gets to college, too. Thanks for commenting.
This gave me chills. I LOVE happy endings.
Reminds me of 'The Millionaire' show! Nicely done.
You knew instantly that she wasn't happy woman, but eventually she was! Nicely done. I just love happy endings.
Tammy: Thanks. Me too!
Tumblewords: You're only the second person to notice the comparison. I loved that show, and yes that's where I got the idea.
Neilina: I would be happy too if someone handed me a million dollars. Thanks for commenting.
Hi B,
I'm here via Sun. Scribblings. Like a circular staircase, this enticed me higher and higher. Smiled at the ending.
i wonder if this is based on a true story? mary pickford was a 20s star, no? this was nice.
You drew me right in from the first words. Hope it all turns out well for Mary:).
What a lovely story for 'I knew instantly...' :) Well done.
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